Sacramento’s Eden REVISED at Fremont Correctional Facility

Sacramento’s Eden REVISED LAST STANZA

READER, PLEASE ADVISE, OR TELL ME WHICH VERSION YOU LIKE BEST. THANK YOU. JIM)

When visiting California’s state capital
I walked up the sidewalk towards the capital
then looked to the left to see. . .

Is that a snake slithering into the shadows?
Hunch-backed in their green vestments
bushes listen; the asian pear tree drops
one apple; you hear the “thud,”
you turn, expecting to see Adam and Eve.

. . . see over here, here
where soft shadows of morning
float over the silvery wet grass
tall sun-lit trees line a vestibule
where you kneel, stretch out your arms
then bring your hands together

touch fingertips to fingertips.
Here, you pray with your eyes open
in one call to heaven and hell
light and shadows, sin and grace,
all mingle to murmur their vows
as the air waves incense of forgiveness.

(Tomorrow I will tell you which version I think is best and why. And why I indulge in this creative process. Jim)

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About Ciletti

Jim Ciletti, an award winning poet, filmmaker, and author, is the 2010-2012, Poet Laureate of the Pikes Peak region, and for 41 years, poet-in-residence for the Orme School Fine Arts Festival. Jim gives many workshops on the writing and performance of poetry, and makes poetry house calls to create personal poetry events. Ciletti loves everything Italian, including cooking for family and friends, and loves to plant garlic, make homemade wine, and eating peaches and plums. "Everyday is Christmas, but you don't always get everything you ask for. Sometimes more. Poetry celebrates life."
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