Sacramento’s Eden REVISED LAST STANZA
READER, PLEASE ADVISE, OR TELL ME WHICH VERSION YOU LIKE BEST. THANK YOU. JIM)
When visiting California’s state capital
I walked up the sidewalk towards the capital
then looked to the left to see. . .
Is that a snake slithering into the shadows?
Hunch-backed in their green vestments
bushes listen; the asian pear tree drops
one apple; you hear the “thud,”
you turn, expecting to see Adam and Eve.
. . . see over here, here
where soft shadows of morning
float over the silvery wet grass
tall sun-lit trees line a vestibule
where you kneel, stretch out your arms
then bring your hands together
touch fingertips to fingertips.
Here, you pray with your eyes open
in one call to heaven and hell
light and shadows, sin and grace,
all mingle to murmur their vows
as the air waves incense of forgiveness.
(Tomorrow I will tell you which version I think is best and why. And why I indulge in this creative process. Jim)